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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the development scale of
petroleum
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, coal, and natural
gas
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 in the UK for 19
years
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.
Overall
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, the data indicate a rise
for
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in
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Petroleum
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 during the first
year
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.
Similarly
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, Natural
gas
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 was stable in
year
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 one and increased significantly in the
last
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year
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,
while
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 coal has constantly decreased every
year
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 in the UK. With regards to the data, production of
Petroleum
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 increased around 100 to 140 Energy Units in 5
years
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.
On the other hand
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,
Petroleum
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 declined to 100 in 2
years
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.
Similarly
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, Coal dropped dramatically between 1981 and 1986 from 80 to 40. Coal got back up in 1986 but dropped continuously from 60 to approximately 40 in the
last
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 3
years
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.
However
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, Natural
gas
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 was stable at 40 Energy Units
from
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in
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 the first
year
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.
Furthermore
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, in 1991 Natural
gas
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 grew greatly from 40 to 100.
Likewise
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,
Petroleum
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 climbed again in the middle of 1991 to 1996.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, similarly".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, gas, years, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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