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Band 2.5

31.Some people say that too much time and resource are spent on the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that a
sufficiant
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sufficient
 amount of time and resources are spent on the protection of wild
animals
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 and birds. Because of
the
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climat
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climate
 change and violence
againest
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against
animals
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,
the
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wild
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wildlife
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life
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 has been in
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a dentremental
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dentremental
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detrimental
 situation.
There for
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,
i
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 strongly agree with the given statement. In
todays
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today's
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 world, because of the
globlisation
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globalisation
globalization
wilde
animals
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is
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are
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 suffering to survive in the wild by
it self
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themselves
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with out
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without
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 the help of humans.
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,
internatinal
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international
 and national efforts have been taken place.
In other words
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, in order to save some
sourt
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sort
 of
animals
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 from becoming extinct, governments
begain
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began
begin
 to build special
institution
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institutions
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 and
safary
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safari
 to
provied
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provide
 good animal care . In
addtion
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addition
, more resources and money are being spent on animal protection, Because of the criminal actions taken on
animals
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 in
wild
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wildlife
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life
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.
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Moreover
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 the lack of food and water are
prim
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primary
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reasones
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reasons
 for the creation of
reserve
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reserves
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 which is another reason why much time and resources are being spent on
the
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wild
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wildlife
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life
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.
to conclude
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take
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taking
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caring
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 of
wild
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wildlife
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life
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 is a global
responsibilty
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responsibility
,
however
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,
i
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I
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 agree that
wild
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wildlife
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life
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 is being protected and much time and effort are being spent .

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task achievement
Ensure that your argument is clearly stated and directly addresses whether you agree or disagree with the statement. Clarifying your position in the introduction can help the reader understand your stance better.
coherence
Work on the logical flow of your ideas; use clear topic sentences to introduce each new idea in your paragraphs, so readers can easily follow your logic.
language accuracy
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. Small errors such as 'sufficiant,' 'climat,' and 'prim reasones' can distract from your argument and lower your score.
task achievement
You provide a clear opinion in your argument, showing your stance on the issue.
task achievement
You attempt to include relevant reasons for your viewpoint, such as the effect of globalization on wildlife and the reasons for resource allocation.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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