In many countries nowadays consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a postive or negative development? give resons for your answer and include relevant examples?

In recent times, many businesses
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to show their products are new or different in some way.
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is often seen in
advertisments
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advertisements
, where
companies
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focus on the idea of something being modern or just released. There are
few
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a few
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reasons why
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happen
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, and
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trend
have
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both good and bad sides. One reason is that
companies
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want to attract more
people
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to buy their products. In a market with so many choices, saying that something is new
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makes
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it sound more interesting.
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, when Apple release a new iPhone, they always advertise it with new features, even if the changes are not very big.
People
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still line up to buy it because they think it’s better than the older version.
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show
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shows
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how strong the idea of “new” is in
customer
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customers
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minds.
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,
this
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kind of advertising can be misleading. Sometimes, the product is not really new, it just
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small changes like
color
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or packaging.
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, some snack
companies
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say they have a “new taste” but it is almost
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the same
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as before.
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can confuse the customers and make them spend money
for
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nothing new.
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, making
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always want the “newest” version can create waste and
over consumption
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overconsumption
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, which is not good for
environment
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the environment
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.
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,
people
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often throw away working electronics to get
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a
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new model. In conclusion, saying that a product is new can help businesses sell more and attract attention, but it
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can cause problems like false advertising and waste. I think it’s important for
companies
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to be honest and for customers to be more careful when choosing what to buy.

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task achievement
Ensure all ideas are fully developed and supported with clear examples. For instance, elaborate on how misleading advertising impacts consumer behavior or the environment beyond just mentioning confusion.
coherence and cohesion
Work on grammar accuracy. There are a few small errors like 'this happen' (should be 'this happens') and 'make it sound' (should be 'makes it sound').
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the use of linking words and phrases to improve flow. Consider using transitions like 'Furthermore', 'Additionally', or 'On the other hand' to connect ideas better.
task achievement
You've presented a balanced argument discussing both sides of the topic, which is commendable.
task achievement
Your examples, especially the one regarding Apple, are relevant and help illustrate your points effectively.

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