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The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the number of
students
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 determined in some schools from 2001 to 2007.
Overall
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, Royal Latin, Didcot Secondary, and Seven
Oaks
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 showed fluctuating
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trend
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trends
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, despite
this
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Oaks
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 Secondary presented the highest number among other schools. Meanwhile, Page Hills
experience
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has experienced
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 upward trends
during
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over
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 the years. As can be seen, Seven
Oaks
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 and Didcot Secondary experienced an unstable
trend
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, but Seven
Oaks
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 reached the highest number of
students
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, about nearly 1000
students
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. By 2003, Didcot Secondary increased minimally from just above 600 to around 700 and
then
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 remained stable for a year. It dropped immediately for two years until it reached around 700.
On the other hand
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, Royal Latin depicts an upward
trend
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 over the period,
by
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from
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 about 300
students
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 to nearly 800
students
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.
Furthermore
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, Page Hills
also
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 showed a positive
trend
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 as well, from 2001 until 2004 and it rose to nearly 500
students
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.
However
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, there was a minimal fall one year later,
by
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from
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 around 50
students
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 to about 450
students
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, oaks, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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