Write an essay discussing two of the points in your notes. You should explain which way would be more effective in encouraging young people to study science, providing reasons to support your opinion. You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion but you should use your own words as far as possible.

Science
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is very crucial in every
individial's
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individual's
throughout
life
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. Organising
science
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fairs and
competition
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in schools
help
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helps
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students
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to create innovative ideas and critical thinking. These events give ideas and
chance
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a chance
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to think innovative and it will give them
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the opputunity
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opputunity
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opportunity
to showcase their talent in
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field. I will discuss
about
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how it will help
students
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more effectively in my essay.
Firstly
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,
Young
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generation should know more about
science
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as
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technology is booming so fast. They can start with their school days by participating
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science
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seminars,
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science
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and science
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projects where they will learn
reallife
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real life
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examples and creative ideas and how everything in our lives is connected to
science
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.
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,
Students
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and young people should do some
practicle
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practical
things to learn
science
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as it will boost their confidence for their
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further
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life
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.
Secondly
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, I believe that young people should choose
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Science
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a Science
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Degree
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as B.TECH,B.SC etc as their major subject in college for their future plans because
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will give them very high
oppurtunity
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opportunity
to get
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good
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paid job because studying B.TECH or any IT subjects is the highest paid job in the world.
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,
Students
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or
young
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generation should learn and take
science
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as their major subject as
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will help them
alot
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a lot
in their whole
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whether it is personal or
proffessional
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professional
. So, I totally support
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this
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statement and encourage everyone to learn and know more about
science
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in their early
life
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task achievement
Clarify your thesis statement to better outline your main points at the end of your introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader through your ideas.
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Include more specific examples or evidence to strengthen your argument about studying science.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the importance of science education for young people.
task achievement
You successfully identify the relevance of practical experience in learning science.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • experiential learning
  • real-world applications
  • interactive simulations
  • virtual reality
  • immersive learning experiences
  • mentorship programs
  • role models
  • career paths
  • science fairs
  • critical thinking
  • innovation
  • abstract concepts
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