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Some people think that living in a city can give a lot of benefits in terms of health. Others think that living in the village is the best choice for a healthy lifestyle. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although
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 it is sometimes thought that living in
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the urben
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urben
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urban
 area has plenty of advantages
of
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to
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keep
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keeping
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 well-being,other
people
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 believe that
sattling
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settling
sitting
 down in the
countryside
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 is
the
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an
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 excellent choice for leading a healthy lifestyle.In my opinion,I consider that living in a pretty
countryside
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has
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 highly
benificial
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beneficial
 for
health
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. On the one hand,some
people
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 think that
comparing
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compared
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 to
dwell
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dwelling
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 in a
city
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,living in a small town will bring more benefits,and I agree.In the other
wrods
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words
,the
villige's
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village's
 environment and relationship
bewteen
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between
 inhabitants,
which
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apply
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 provide a peaceful and harmonious community for citizens.
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,
people
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 who
living
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live
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 in the
contryside
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countryside
 generally
has
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have
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longer
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a longer
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 life span than
people
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 who
living
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live
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 in
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city
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the city
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.
Furthermore
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,
due to
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 less mental and
ecnomic
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economic
 pressure,the village inhabitants have
highly
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high
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 happiness and
health
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 indexes.
On the other hand
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,it
is believe
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 that it is better if
people
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sattle
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settle
 down in
metropoils
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metropolis
. One reason is that citizens can enjoy advanced medical technology in the
city
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.It will dramatically decrease the rate of death.
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,if a person
suffer
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suffers
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 from cancer , the probability
that
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of
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 surviving for a longer time in a big
city
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 is much higher than that who in the
countryside
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.Another reason is that inhabitants generally
be
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are
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well-educeted
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well-educated
.It means that
people
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 acquire
health
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 information and
konwledge
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knowledge
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that are
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are
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is
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 more convenient and
efficient
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efficiently
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.It can enable
people
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 to keep healthy and extend
life
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their life
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 span in a scientific way.
To sum up
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,
while
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people
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 may vary in their opinions, I think that living in
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countryside
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the countryside
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 will have more positive impacts on
health
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 than living in the
city
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.

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coherence
Consider breaking down your paragraphs further into clear points to enhance logical flow. For instance, each paragraph could start with a clear topic sentence.
task achievement
Your essay presents genuine engagement with the prompt and offers opinions clearly, demonstrating understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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