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May people prefer to stay in the same type of work all their life , whereas others prefer to c h a n g e the type of work. Discuss both sides and state your own opinion.

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that
jobs
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 represent a major part
in
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 our life.
While
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 it is
commonly
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a commonly
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 held belief that, some folks prefer to do the same
typ
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type
 of work for their
howl
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whole
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 life, there is
also
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 an argument that opposes it.
This
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both
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 of
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 and express my opinion.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, repeating the same thing for
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time
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 could lead to mystery
it
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. In the meaning
of
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,
practice
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practising
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 the same job for
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a long
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 period of
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 will make the mind
use
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 to it and work
will
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well
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 done
aotomaticliy
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automatically
.
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, in the
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 of
dantic
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joruney
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journey
 will be hard how to deal with
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dantic
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 but, with
time
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 it will be something easy to overcome
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apply
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.
Body paragraph 2
On
they
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 other hand,
do
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 many
type
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types
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 of work in your life will give you
a
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apply
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virous
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various
virus
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diffrent
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different
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, you will have
the
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an
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 idea
for
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 the environment in
may
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many
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jobs
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 and how to deal with
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depend
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depending
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 on the environment.
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, doctor and plioce the skills
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needed
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 to be a doctor
is
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diffrenet
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different
 from the skills to be
police
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a police
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 so,
doctor
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the doctor
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 must be calm and
pilyt
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patient
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for
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police must be strict and hard
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with
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 others.
Conclusion
In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views
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I
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 believe that
,
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do
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doing
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 the same job for
long
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a long
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time
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 will make
may
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many
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people
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expert
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experts
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 in their
jobs
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.

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grammatical accuracy
Ensure that sentences are grammatically correct and clear. For example, "some folks prefer to do the same typ of work for their howl life" should be corrected for spelling errors and clarity.
content clarity
Strengthen the examples given to better illustrate your points. For instance, the explanation about dentists could be clearer and more logically presented.
cohesive devices
Improve the logical flow between points. Make clear transitions to enhance coherence, such as explicit markers for contrast.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, showing your understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Your conclusion clearly reflects your opinion on the matter, which is a strong element of the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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