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Some people believe that governments should pay full course fees for students who want to study in universities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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there is no denying the fact that some
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full
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for full
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course
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based on
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problem
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decrease
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 money for them
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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governments should pay full
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fees
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 for students , there is
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 consider that the
goverments
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government
governments
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fees
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 for poor
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decrease
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 the tuition
fees
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to begin
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with
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 most
people
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 see the subject of another views see the tuition
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 us for quality
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life
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 and improve
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 skills.
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addition
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full
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improve
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our
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easier
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. another point to consider increases
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the
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the
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education it is so difficult for general
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full
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the full
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course
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decrease
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poor
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people
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 if the
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decreases
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 the will automatically
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people
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 having different
view
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i
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 believe that the
decrease
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 tuition
fees
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 is the best way to
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improve
imprve
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improve
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life
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task achievement
Improve the clarity of your arguments and explanations. Make sure each point you present is developed and clearly linked to your main argument.
coherence and cohesion
Focus on structuring your essay more clearly. Use paragraphs effectively, ensuring each paragraph contains a single clear idea and starts with a topic sentence.
language
Use diverse vocabulary and grammar structures to enrich your writing. This will help convey your ideas more effectively and might lead to a higher score.
content
Your intent to present a balanced view and address both sides of the argument is commendable.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • University tuition
  • Public good
  • Economic growth
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Merit-based scholarships
  • Need-based grants
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Educational equity
  • Income-contingent loans
  • Graduate tax
  • Financial aid
  • Student loans
  • Subsidize
  • Taxpayer funding
  • Underappreciation
  • Workforce development
  • Access to education
  • Higher learning institutions
  • Government expenditure
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