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Writing Samples
Band 5

You live in a house opposite a park. Every day a man brings large dogs to the park and lets them run free. Write a letter to your local council complaining about the danger. In your letter -say where the park is, -say how often this happens -give a description of the man and the dogs.

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to report
unsatisfactory
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 situation which taking place in
dog
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the dog
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 garden because of
leas-free
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the leas-free
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 dog in the park. As I work early in the morning, I like to spend my free time outside in the evenings. There is a park named Don situated near my apartment a
15-minutes
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15-minute
 walk. I often spend my time reading books in the garden.
Although
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 I find the
surrounding
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quite
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quiet
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 enough for my reading session, I am having difficulties owing to
the a
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the
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 unguided pet left in the park occasionally. It started recently, I was not bothered at first as I wondered
it
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if it
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 could be a mistake.
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, I am confident to say it is done on
regular
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 basis, for
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 a week intentionally. I vaguely
seen
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 the man’s face as he always wears
hoodie
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 cap and glasses, which makes it difficult to clearly see his face.
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, I can recognize his pet which he let run
lose
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. It is a
bull-dog
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bulldog
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,
fairly
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 huge body almost
a
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 size of a toddler. I hope you look into
this
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 problem. Yours sincerely, Jojo

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly states the purpose of the letter in a more straightforward manner.
Task Achievement
Use more specific details about how often the man lets the dogs run free; this could strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to organize your thoughts in a more structured way, ideally with a clear progression from one point to the next.
Task Achievement
You succeeded in describing the park location and the issue with the dogs.
Coherence and Cohesion
The closing statement was polite and effective, conveying your expectation for action.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public safety
  • unleashed
  • danger to pedestrians
  • local regulations
  • particular concern
  • pose risk
  • hazard to children
  • aggressive behavior
  • council action
  • identifiable features
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