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Band 4.5

You attended a conference and noticed that a speaker gave incorrect information. - say what was the mistake - how it influenced the presentation - suggest a way to correct it

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to bring your attention to a mistake made by one of the speakers during the recent technology conference held on April 20th. The speaker mentioned that the internet was invented in 1995, which is incorrect. The internet was actually developed much earlier, with key developments taking place in the 1960s and 1970s.
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 misinformation could confuse the audience, especially students and young professionals relying on the talk for accurate historical context. To prevent
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 issues in the future, I suggest fact-checking the presentations beforehand. It would
also
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 be helpful to share presentation slides with attendees, allowing for clarification if needed. Yours faithfully,
Asliddin
Correct your spelling
Aladdin

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coherence and cohesion
While your introduction is clear, consider providing a brief outline of the points you will discuss in the letter. This would improve the logical flow.
coherence and cohesion
Although your conclusion provides a suggestion, it could be stronger if you summarized the main points briefly before the suggestion. This would reinforce your message.
task achievement
Consider including more specific examples of how misinformation can impact individuals or the field of technology, as this would enhance your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which makes it easy to follow.
task achievement
You addressed the task effectively by identifying the mistake, its impact, and suggesting a solution, which fulfills the requirements.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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