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In certain countries, the number of people who use bicycles as the main means of transport is reducing even though it is beneficial both physically and environmentally. What can be the reasons for this change in preference? How can people be encouraged to use bicycles? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there are many alternatives
transport
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to transport
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 for
people
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 to choose
rather
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 than bicycles.
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, bus, metro, or private car.
Individuals
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 may prefer to
use
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 those vehicles, even though riding a bike can promote physical and environmental problems.
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, in
this
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 essay, I will discuss
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the possible reasons why
people
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 are denied to
use
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bicycles
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of bicycles
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 and how can we encourage them to start riding bikes again.
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 with, there are specific explanations for why
people
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 change their biking preference. One of the main reasons is to save
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. Using alternative vehicles
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 as cars or trains could be a better option for them to reach their destination
quicker
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.
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, riding a bicycle to school might take 30 minutes.
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, if we
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 the metro, it might reduce the
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 to 10 minutes.
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, the metro can serve less travelling
time
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 to the ones that are in a hurry.
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, the majority of
people
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 would not want to waste their vacation
time
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 too much, as it is better for them to do something else.
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, we can encourage
individuals
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 to ride on a bike by supporting cycling
comfortability
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. Many
individuals
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 are
also
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 afraid of cycling on the road, as there are many cars passing by.
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, if we can promote security for them, it would be easier for citizens to choose bikes over other transportation.
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, in my country, there is no bicycle lane on the road.
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, the government should establish a lane along the footpath and create a barrier between the main roads to ensure safety.
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,
this
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 will not only enhance
people
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's journey costs by riding on a bike but
also
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 can benefit the environmental issues of the earth.
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, many
individuals
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 in recent years tend to
use
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 public transportation to save their travelling
time
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.
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, riding a bicycle can promote a healthy life and
environmentally
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be environmentally
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 friendly.

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Task Achievement
Your essay addresses the task and presents relevant reasons for the decline in bicycle use and suggestions for encouraging it. However, it could benefit from a clearer structure and the development of ideas. Make sure to elaborate more on your points for clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of your ideas. Some sentences feel disconnected, and your arguments could be organized in a clearer manner to enhance the reader's understanding. Consider using linking words more effectively.
Task Achievement
You've identified relevant reasons for the decline in cycle usage and proposed valid solutions.
Task Achievement
Your use of examples from personal experience adds credibility to your arguments, which is commendable.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • urban development
  • safety concerns
  • traffic congestion
  • cultural perception
  • prestige
  • harsh weather conditions
  • convenience
  • awareness campaigns
  • environmental impact
  • sustainable transport
  • commuting habits
  • bicycle lanes
  • recreational cycling
  • active transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • public transportation
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