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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided diagrams
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the transformation of a
centre
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 sports
centre
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 of
an
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a
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 university before and after.
Overall
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, the stadium is planned completely
different
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differently
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 including
expand
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expanding
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 more spaces and new facilities. Before development, the main area is now surrounded by
out door
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outdoor
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 courts
at
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on
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 two
side
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, from the left to the right.
Besides
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, the pool is in the middle of the
centre
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,
while
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 the room used to change clothes is on the left.
In
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 the North side is a gym, near the changing room and opposite
with
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the swimming pool.
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, next to the gym is the seating area, which is on the right-hand of the swimming place.
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, on the Southern is a reception place to service customers. The
sport
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centre
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 is expected in the future with significant
tranformation
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transformation
.
In the
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 central, it will
be remained
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remain
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 except
the
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for the
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 gym
consider
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considered
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 expanded,
two
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and two
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 outdoor courts will be destroyed and replaced.
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,
sports
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a sports
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 hall will be built close to the
the
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apply
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place where people can
seat
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sit
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,
whereas
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 two dance
studio
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studios
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 are expected to
built
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be built
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 closely on the East of the hall.
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, on the west, a leisure pool will be
contructed
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constructed
. More changing rooms will be added,
in
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at
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 the bottom of both sides of the plan, next to it is
shop
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a shop
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 providing sports items on the right and a cafe shop on the left.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly define the features mentioned in the diagrams and to make specific comparisons between the two layouts. Adding more details can help improve your score.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the structure of your essay by clearly organizing your points. You may want to use paragraphs to separate different themes and make the comparison clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical accuracy and try to use varied vocabulary. Some sentences could be improved for clarity and readability.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear overview of the main changes and includes some specific features of the sports center, which is a good start.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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