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Band 4.5

Nowadays most of the people prefer using keyboard for their assignments and they are not used pen or pencil. Discuss the both points give your opinion

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There is no denying the fact that people need to write their duties.
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 it is a
common
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 held belief that writing by using
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keyboard
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the keyboard
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 is favourable, there is
also
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 an argument that
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 using the traditional way for their assignments by
ysin
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using
 pen is more fast. In my opinion,
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, using
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 or pen is an
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but
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I prefer to
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 the modern method by using
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keyboard
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 because it is easy to read. On the one hand, people are required to do their tasks and
this
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 should be writing to be memorable. Duties need to be written as a list on
papers
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 because of the afraid
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 them which
show
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 the importance of using pencils.
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, my father always carried
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 and paper to write his goals every day which
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 him to be organised.
On the other hand
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,
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keyboard
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 is the modern way and the most popular currently. Some people like using
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keyboard
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the keyboard
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 for their missions because they can save it on the phone for
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 time, and it
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also
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provide
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 a clear vision
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 the written words without
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.
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, university students
using
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Exceel
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Excel
 to organise their
homeworks
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homework
,
so
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that
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assist
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assists
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 them
to achieve
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 their goals. In conclusion, individuals have to write
thier
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their
 assignments to avoid forget doing them.
However
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, persons
used
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pencil
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pencils
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 or
pen
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pens
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 believe
down
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that
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them
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their
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 goals on paper
is
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 the fastest, I totally agree with the side that thing using smartphones for
the
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assignments
it
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is
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 the best way because it
easy
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to
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 the eye to be reading.

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task response
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position and outlines the points you will discuss. Consider rephrasing to improve clarity, such as 'While many believe that using a keyboard is more efficient, I believe that traditional methods have their advantages.'
coherence and cohesion
Pay more attention to grammar and sentence structure. Phrases such as 'the most popular currently' should be restructured for clarity. For example, you could say 'is currently the most popular method.'
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas more clearly, for example, 'In addition' or 'Moreover' at the beginning of paragraphs or when introducing new points.
coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your vocabulary. Instead of repeating 'using keyboard' and 'using pencil,' diversify your language with synonyms to enhance your writing.
task achievement
The essay presents both sides of the argument, which shows an understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Examples provided, such as your father's method of goal-setting, help to illustrate your points effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion summarizes the main points, reinforcing your opinion clearly.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficiency
  • streamlined
  • editing
  • organizing thoughts
  • digital tools
  • spell check
  • grammar check
  • clarity
  • memory retention
  • cognitive processes
  • creativity
  • fine motor skills
  • tactile satisfaction
  • cognitive development
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