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Band 2.5

Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day. But still some people prefer to work in offices. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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For a start, the model of working from home is really expanding and developing matter. Regardless of not getting in touch with your employees or employers, you save your time, not spending in strict
traffics
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 and other problems make your situation more difficult. By the way, there are many companies pursuing online
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 and they get rather good results.
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, our problematic point is responsibility,
about
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 how employees work on the back of the telephones or
computer
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. Even if you get things you want you will suspect am i doing right or
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 way remain well forever. As always, if the thins has good sides, there must be bad sides. Moving on
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 second topic,
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 method makes employers comfortable,
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 you observe the
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compatibility
 of work and can give your
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recommendations
. People are becoming more accountable in that case. Employees are in one
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environment
 and it is not online, ultimately they do not face
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depression about being at home
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 time.
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 most people"s thoughts, being offline
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to
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 communicate easily and
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aim
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. Following
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last
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 years, demands
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change
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 substantially. There are already companies going on their daily work
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online and trying to find the best online methods in spite of their hugeness or their reputations

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coherence and cohesion
Your introduction could be clearer and more structured. Consider stating the two views explicitly and then your opinion in the introduction.
task achievement
Ensure all points are well-supported with relevant examples or explanations to reinforce your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid grammar and spelling errors, as they can detract from the overall clarity of your writing. Consider proofreading your work before submission.
task achievement
You have identified some important points about working from home and in an office, which shows your understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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