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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

The local council has decided to build a block of flats on the park opposite the place where you are living Write a letter to the editor of the local newspaper: - Where did you hear this news and your opinion? - The reason why you protest it - Make suggestions for what people can or should do to stop the development

Dear
sir
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 or
madam
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, Hope
this
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 letter finds you radiant and
health
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a
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the
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 best of
spirit
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spirits
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. I am writing
this
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 letter to explain the
situation
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 which is related to
that
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apply
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the local council has
decided
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decision
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 to build a block of flats
on
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in
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 the park opposite the place where I am living. I am going to explain the
situation
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 in the belong to the course in the following paragraphs. I
am go
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 to the work
midia
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media
milia
 shop from by the newspaper. And the news read and be in a bad temper why ours Infront of the flat.
However
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 we not
listening
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listening to
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 the
situation
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. Ours contrary to the building why harmful pollutants to the nature. That's why the construction
couse of
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causes
 certain ones to problems. I would like to
asking
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ask
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 if
yours
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you
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 can find a
situation
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 to these
a
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apply
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problems. We will guide you to the right place. I am looking forward to learning
you
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from you
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 as soon as possible. Yours faithfully. Rustamov Ahrorbek

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coherence cohesion
Try to create clearer paragraphs by focusing on a single idea in each. This will make your argument more structured and easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your grammar is accurate, especially in verb tenses and sentence construction, to improve clarity.
task achievement
Make sure your response fully addresses the prompt, providing specific reasons for your protests and suggestions.
task achievement
Consider using a more formal tone throughout the letter, including in your greeting and closing.
task achievement
You have made a good effort to express your main opinion about the development and its effects on nature.
task achievement
Your intention to engage with the readers and the local council is commendable, as it encourages community involvement.
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