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The bar chart shows the percentage of households with cars in a European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of households with cars in a European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the
car
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 ownership
rate
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 of households in a European country from 1971 to 2001.
Overall
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,
chart
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the chart
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 shows 3 objects, there are: no
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car
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cars
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,
one
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car
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 and more than 2
cars
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. The
rate
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 of no
car
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,
one
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car
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 and more than 2
cars
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 have changed unevenly over
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the pass
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pass
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past
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 year for 30 years. In 1971, the
no
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no-car
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car
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rate
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is
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was
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 the highest.
To
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In
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 2001, the
rate
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 is the lowest. Between 1971 and 2001, the percentage of
one
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car
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 is between no
car
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 and more than
two
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cars
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 in 1971. And from 1981 to 2001, it rises from under 45% to 55% and takes the highest
rate
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. The proportion of no
car
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,
one
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car
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 and
more
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apply
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two
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car
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cars
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 are 45%, 35% and 25% in 1971.
To
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In
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 1981, the changed number is no
car
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 with 35%,
one
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car
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 43% and 33% of more than
two
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cars
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. 10 years later, all the rates
fall
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fell
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 down,
no
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with no
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car
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downs
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down
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 2%,
one
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car
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falls
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falling
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 3% and 7% for more than
two
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cars
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. In 2001,
ratio
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the ratio
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 of
one
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car
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is
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was
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 the highest
with
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at
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 55%, more than 2
cars
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also
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goes
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went
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 up
40
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by 40
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% but no
car
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goes
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went
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 down
25
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by 25
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%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, rate, one, cars, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes up" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • households
  • car ownership
  • no car
  • one car
  • two or more cars
  • trend
  • proportion
  • gradual increase
  • significant growth
  • decline
  • substantial
  • rivals
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