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Writing Samples
Band 4

What is your opinion .Nowadays some people like to live in a big house and some people prefer to life in apartment. What do you prefer and why?

People nowadays are really different
between
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 before. Now
the
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apply
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most
of
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apply
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families are
create
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 by four at five people but,they live in a big
house
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand,before families
created
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were created
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 by eleven or more
but
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apply
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, they
live
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lived
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 in a small or a
medium
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medium-sized
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house
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,so, you can see the difference between the
generation
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generations
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. For me I prefer large houses but,when I have a lot of brothers and sisters. Now I only have one brother
that is
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,
mean
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apply
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I prefer a
medium
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medium-sized
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house
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.
Also
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,it depends on the family and the budget. Not only
,but
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that,but
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also
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,everyone
prefer
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prefers
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 to
life
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live
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 in a big
house
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 because they like to send many invites
for
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to
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 their friends to have a
funny
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fun
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 time with each
other's
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others
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. So, if you live in a big
house
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 maybe you will have a great time and maybe you will get a boring time. When you have a huge family it is a great thing,because you can't be boring it's extremely interesting. I wish I had a huge family because when you have only one brother and he is older than you between five years it's really a boring thing. Why? Because his mind is not
same
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the same
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yours
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. It's very different.
That is
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, mean or I mean you need to thank god about having a huge family
of
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or
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 large
house
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 or about anything you need to thank god.
Furthermore
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,if you live in a small
house
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 maybe it will affect
about
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apply
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your level in your school
to
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better. Why!? Because you will have a big dream. It is to make a huge
house
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 for your family and take them to another life. But if your father is extremely rich you will say oh! My father is rich I don't need to study or work. It's not fair! But in the middle budget
such
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 us,you need to fair your study and your life.
However
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,if your father is rich,in the middle budget
such
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us
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as us
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,or poor, you need to study to make a
beg
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big
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house
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,
to
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apply
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 get married and
to
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build a successful family.
This
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 is my opinion.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of your ideas. Organize your thoughts into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on a single point. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
task achievement
Work on using more specific examples to support your points. This will not only make your argument stronger but also provide more clarity to your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure. Some sentences are quite long and could be simplified for better understanding. Use punctuation effectively to break up ideas.
task achievement
You express a clear personal preference and provide reasoning for it, which is an essential part of the task.
task achievement
Your reflective thoughts on the impacts of family size and housing on life are interesting and show engagement with the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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