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The chart below showstransport preferences in percentage among youngsters of four countries in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart depicts the choice of vehicle from a car, a motorcycle or a bicycle by the young population of Australia, the US,
Canada
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 and New
Zealand
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 in the year 2000. The unit is measured in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of preferences.
Overall
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, it can be understood that in all the concerned countries, cars
had
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 been the most preferred vehicles compared to
the
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motorcycles among the youth.
To begin
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 with, 60% of the youngsters in Australia had shown an enormous fondness for cars
while
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 bicycles were their second favourite choice standing at a percentage of 50. Compared to all other nationalities, Australian youth least preferred motorbike at only
one fifth
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. A similar trend existed in the United States where
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car users stood tall at 80%. At the same time, motorcycle and bicycle preferences were at 25% and 60% respectively.
On the other hand
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, 50% of the young citizens of both
Canada
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 and New
Zealand
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 have opted for cars in the given time period. Youngsters from New
Zealand
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 prefer more motorbikes at 40%, compared to their counterparts from other countries.
This
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 trend is followed by
Canada
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 with 30 %.
However
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, bicycles retain their position in both
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countries
at
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as
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 the second choice with 45% in New
Zealand
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 and 35% in
Canada
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.

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task achievement
Make sure the introduction clearly outlines the main points you will discuss in your summary.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure there is a logical flow in your comparisons—perhaps using linking words to clarify similarities and differences.
coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your vocabulary to avoid repetition (e.g., instead of repeating 'preferred', use synonyms like 'favored' or 'chosen').
task achievement
Good use of percentages to convey preferences clearly.
task achievement
The overall summary gives a clear picture of the trends in vehicle preference among the countries.

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