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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the average monthly temperatures in
London
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, New
York
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, and
Sydney
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,
while
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 the table provides the
overall
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 year duration of sunshine for each city. Regarding the graph chart, New
York
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’s temperatures vary dramatically, starting at around 2
°C
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 in January, peaking at approximately 30
°C
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 in July, and falling back to near freezing by December.
London
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 displays milder variation, ranging from about 5
°C
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 in winter to roughly 23
°C
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 during summer months.
In contrast
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,
Sydney
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 enjoys a more stable climate, with temperatures remaining between 15
°C
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 and 25
°C
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, reaching their peak during January and February and hitting their lowest around July. Turning to sunshine
hours
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, New
York
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 leads with 2,535
hours
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 per year, followed closely by
Sydney
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 with 2,473
hours
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.
London
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,
however
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, has significantly fewer
hours
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 of sunshine,
totaling
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totalling
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 only 1,180 annually.
Overall
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, New
York
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 experiences the greatest temperature fluctuations throughout the year,
while
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Sydney
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 shows an opposite seasonal pattern compared to
London
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 and New
York
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, york, sydney, °c, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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