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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate the significant changes in the floor plan of a public
library
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 20 years ago and now.
Overall
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, the central
library
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 has undergone extensive transformation, particularly in terms of equipment and facilities.
Additionally
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, tables and chairs which were in the middle of the
library
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 have been removed. One notable transformation is the information desk. The area of
the
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apply
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adult non-fiction
books
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 was demolished to make way for
information
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an information
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 desk,
self- service
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self-service
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 machines and adult fiction
books
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. Another significant change in the northwest is that the place of children's
books
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 was removed and the lecture room has been replaced.
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,
in
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 the bottom of the automatic
self machine
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, the coffee shop has been built. Moving to the west of the
library
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,
computer
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a computer
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 room has been
stablished
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established
. The final interesting developments include the introduction of the area for all reference
books
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 and children's fiction
books
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 and
also
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 there are two sofas for sitting on them.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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