It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.

Is that right that lives now are difficult to escape the influence of the
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we can do is to admit it
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are the
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there is a
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of
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around us. The
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gives us
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of news that can affect how we
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decision
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in our daily
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lives
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we must have critical thinking as a basis
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. The rich of
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arounds
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around
us sure can affect our life in a good way or a bad way. So,
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for us to have
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good critical thinking for filtering the
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we get from the
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our social
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homepage, sometimes there is an account that
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us the
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and just one
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to attract our likes to that
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those
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are fake or overrated
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just to make their account have a
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of engagement.
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we
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not realize is
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a fake news
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, we can
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a wrong decision and the effect can be really bad for us or the people
around
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around us
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is why we need critical thinking to filter something like that. Before, we had
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about
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the disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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the amount of
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. But, we just must have fair
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right. I think the much of
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around us can help us too. A
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us more
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,
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and more
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perspective, and in the
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we can
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decision
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decisions
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based on all that
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. The rich of
media
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means rich of
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and we can get a hundred different
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in a day. So for the
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we need
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grateful to the
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around us for
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us a
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of
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always
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positives
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and
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in all events. What we can do
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accept and admit the changes had
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we need to
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in
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, have a good mindset and good critical thinking.

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Task Achievement
Strengthen your introduction by clearly stating the advantages and disadvantages of a media-rich society. This will help create a clear roadmap for your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to use proper grammar and structure to improve readability, particularly in complex sentences. Proofreading can help catch typos and grammatical errors.
Task Achievement
Ensure your examples are well-explained and relevant. This will add depth to your arguments. For instance, elaborate on how a specific media example has led to either positive or negative consequences.
Task Achievement
Your understanding of the importance of critical thinking in the context of media is well articulated, showing a strong grasp of a key issue in media consumption.
Task Achievement
You effectively acknowledge both the positive and negative aspects of a media-rich society, which demonstrates a balanced perspective.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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