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The graph below shows the consumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line chart demonstrates the amount of meat consumed per person per week in Spain during the period 1979 to 2004.
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, the popularity of almost every type of meat decreased
among
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 the following
years
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, with chicken as the only exception. Fish consistently had the lowest consumption level throughout the
years
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According to
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 the chart, beef was by far the most preferred consumed meat for Spaniards in 1979, with above 200
grams
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.
However
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, it dropped sharply to about 160
grams
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 in 1984 and
then
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 declined gradually during the rest of the period to nearly 100
grams
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 in 2004. The figure for lamb is lower:
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 it experienced a significant drop from 150
grams
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 to approximately 75
grams
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 in 1999, it climbed up to 80
grams
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 in the
last
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 five
years
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.
In contrast
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, there was a steady growth in the figure for chicken consumption from below 150
grams
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 to about 200
grams
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 in 1999, after which it increased at a faster pace, surpassing beef in 1991.
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, fish always remained the least preferred with a minimal decline over 25
years
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.

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