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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

There is a
debet
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debit
debate
that
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about
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 whether working days should be shorter and
workers
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whether workers
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 should have
a
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apply
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longer
day
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days
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offs
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off
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. I agree with
this
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 point of view and in
this
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 essay, I will
explant
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explain
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 my opinion. I agree with
this
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 statement
is
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because if working
hours
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 become shorter, the
work
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 will be more
effictive
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effective
due to
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 the
limit
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limited
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time
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.
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, in Taiwan, our working
time
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 is 8
hours
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 per day
in
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on
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week days
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weekdays
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. These
hours
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 include
1
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a 1
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to
2
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2-hour
hours
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 lunch break, and we have a habit is taking a
nep
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nap
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 after we have
a
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apply
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lunch. If companies remove the 2
hours
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 break,
let
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and let
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empolyees
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employees
finished
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finish
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thier
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their
 lunch quicker, that can make
total
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the total
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 working
hour
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hours
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 not change but get off
work
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 earlier. That can
hlep
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help
 people have more their
oen
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own
time
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 to do whatever they want,
inculding
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including
 doing household,
mantaining
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maintaining
hobits
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habits
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 or
go
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going
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 to bed earlier
for
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to
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 save more energy for
next
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the next
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 day.
Additionally
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,
job
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jobs
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 do not represent personal value, I believe personal value is based on
their
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apply
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interest,
konwledge
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knowledge
,
the
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apply
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attitude
of
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toward
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 living, and the
reletionship
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relationships
 with
friend
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friends
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 and
familiies
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families
.
Therefore
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,
work
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 should
hust
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just
 take a little part
form
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from
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 life, the most part should
be spend
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be spending
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 a quality
time
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 with friends and families,
evern
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even
 on their
ownself
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own self
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.
For example
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, there have
a
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been a
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lot of
tragedy
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tragedies
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 like children
spend
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spending
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 too much
time
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 on
work
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 and no
time
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 to accompany
with
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apply
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them, so
that
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apply
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they are very
regret
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regretful
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 when their
parent
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parents
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died
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die
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. In conclusion, I agree working
time
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 should be shorter and
worker
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workers
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 should have a longer weekend
,
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apply
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 because people can have more
time
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 to relax and
spent
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spend
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 quality
time
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 with
families
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their families
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure you clearly introduce all your main points in the introduction to help guide the reader through your essay. This will also strengthen the logical structure of your argument.
task achievement
Use varied vocabulary and check spelling mistakes to enhance readability. For example, 'effictive' should be 'effective' and 'hust' should be 'just'.
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Try to elaborate on examples more fully to give a clearer understanding of your points. This can bolster your argument and provide deeper insights for the reader.
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You have a clear opinion that is consistently supported throughout the essay, which demonstrates your engagement with the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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