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The diagram details the process of making leather products. (Anelya2)

The given process diagram illustrates how
leather
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 products are made.
Overall
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, it is a 9-stage, man-made, linear process. It begins with drying and delivering animal
leather
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 and ends in
factory
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the factory
a factory
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, where
finally
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 are made
leather
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 items. First of all, obtained animal skins are dried to make
it
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them
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 completely dry. Following that, they are delivered to
factory
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the factory
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, where the rest of the production steps take place. In turn, in the
leather
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foundry
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foundry,
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 the delivered animal skins are washed in
substance
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a substance
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, which contains water and lime. After that, the washed skins are soaked just in lime consistency.
Subsequently
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, the impregnated animal hides undergo flattening.
Then
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 after that, the hides are soaked again, but in another consistency which consists of liquid and vegetable matter and
this
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 matter is called tannin. From
this
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, the layers of items are polished and
then
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 delivered to another factory.
Finally
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, in the second product fabrication made the different types of merchandise.

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language enhancement
Consider using a more varied vocabulary to describe each step in the process. For example, instead of repeating 'soaked' and 'washed', try synonyms like 'immersed' or 'cleansed'.
coherence
Ensure that each stage of the process is clearly linked to the next. Consider using transitional phrases to improve the flow of your essay.
conclusion enhancement
Add a concluding statement summarizing the overall significance of the process, which would provide a stronger ending to your response.
content quality
The description of the stages in the leather-making process is clear and generally easy to follow, capturing the main steps involved.

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