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Band 4

People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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decide
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a career
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people changing their jobs frequently,
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people
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decide
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carrier
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clearer
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stressful
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workplace
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,it helps them to
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focus
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they choose and they are more likely to get
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conclusion
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people
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people
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financial
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financial
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people
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people
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didn't
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experience
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people who
decied
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decided
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their
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natural
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opinion
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language
Work on improving grammar and spelling to enhance clarity. , for example, instead of 'deciede' use 'decide'.
development
Ensure that your ideas are clearly expressed and supported with specific examples to make your arguments stronger. For instance, you could provide examples of how long-term employees benefit from job loyalty or how frequent job changers gain diverse experience.
structure
Structure your essay more clearly, with distinct paragraphs for each main point. This helps improve coherence and the logical flow of ideas. Ensure each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that summarizes its content.
content
You successfully presented both sides of the argument, which demonstrates a well-rounded perspective on the topic.
content
Your conclusion summarizes your viewpoint clearly, indicating that you have considered both perspectives.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • job satisfaction
  • professional goals
  • climb the career ladder
  • develop expertise
  • long-term commitment
  • financial security
  • varied experiences
  • prevent monotony
  • job security
  • career progression
  • personal preferences
  • industry dynamics
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