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The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar chart explains the amount of money spent on products that are bought and used by individuals in four different European countries over the year
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2012.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the British people were the highest consumers,
while
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 the other countries were the lowest. On the one hand, British society recorded the highest number of buyers they spend up to 170
thousand
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pounds
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 on toys and cameras. Which was the highest registered number in the given year.
On the other hand
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, Belgium
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 to spend cash on them with only 150
thousand
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pounds
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. Console games and outdoor game accessories were the least popular goods consumers bought among these four countries, they spent less than 155
thousand
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pounds
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 on them over the period given.
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, Spain and Austria paid exactly the same amount of money for toys, almost 160
thousand
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pounds
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.
Conversely
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, both cosmetics and outdoor game accessories were
least
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the least
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 favourable among the Austrian population . Belgium was the lowest country that spent money on goods, they did not pay more than 160
thousand
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pounds
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 among the six different goods shown in the graph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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