In many counties children are engages in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.
completed my graduation in hotel and restaurant management six months ago
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study
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have
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done
part time
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a part-time
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job
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as a kitchen helper, so
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have
hands on
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experience working in
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industry.
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did
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internship for six months
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doing study.
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my study and experience,
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think
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am a deserving candidate to get
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job
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.
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will perform my
job
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duties efficiently and effectively.
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hope you will consider my application and give me an opportunity to showcase my skills in your restaurant.
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to hear from you soon.
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faithfully sahajpreet kaur|
kaursahejpreet330
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Task Achievement
Enhance your introduction by clearly stating both sides of the argument before presenting your own opinion at the end.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words and phrases (e.g., however, furthermore, on the other hand) to improve the flow of your ideas and connect paragraphs better.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples or evidence to support the arguments for both views to strengthen the discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is concise and gets straight to the point, clearly expressing your interest in the position.
Fully explain your ideas
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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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