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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart illustrates
that
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apply
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the international trading between
australian
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Australia
 and 4 countries Japan,
US
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the US
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,
China
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, and
India
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 over 22 years from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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China
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 and
India
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shown
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 a rise,
while
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 Japan and
US
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the US
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 had a fall over almost 2 decades for destination
export
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exports
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 for
australia
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Australia
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. At the outset,
India
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 remained steady for 10 years accounting for almost 3 between 1990 and 2000, by followed year,
India
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 reached its peak to just above 5
whereas
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 had
an
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 minimal decline to 5
at the end
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 of the period.
In addition
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,
China
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go
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went
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 up dramatically for trading to just above 25 over the era and reached its highest number among 4 countries in 2012. In 1990,
US
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the US
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 was the second place
of
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in
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australia
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Australia
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 trading destination at just
upper
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the upper
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 10, but until 2012 fell to approximately 5
cross
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across
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 2 countries
China
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 and
India
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.
Additionally
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, Japan
that
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which
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 was the first place in 1990 at just above 25 decreased gradually to approximately 17 over the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentages
  • exports
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • economic ties
  • demand
  • decline
  • recovery
  • policy changes
  • trade relationship
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • temporary surge
  • specific events
  • incentives
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