The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary insititutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

The bar chart, which has been provided below, demonstrates details regarding eight different subjects in Australia in 1995 for both female and male
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.
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, it can be observed from the results that, except in institutions of computer, math, and sciences, accounting and economics, and engineering studies,
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performed greater attendance
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other fields than male
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. Looking at the data more closely,
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art and humanities class maintained its popularity among
females
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with approximately 18%,
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males had just about 13%.
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, in the health course,
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also
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showed more attention than men, with 15% and 4%, respectively. In business studies, both genders had almost the same percentages, nearly 10 to 15%, with a greater number of males in the classes.
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, in engineering, the gap between the genders increased, with 18% of male
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and just 2% of
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, Computing has more male
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, with 10% and fewer than 5% female
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preferred among the other institutions. In conclusion, it can be pointed out that
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females
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attended almost all tertiary courses, males maintained greater performance in
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classes than
females
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in 1995, in Australia.

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