You believe that your local library needs some improvements. Write a letter to the library manager to suggest changes. - explain why you think the library needs improvements. - suggest what changes should be made - invite the manager to discuss your suggestions in more details.

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
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letter about our local
library
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which
it
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apply
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need
a
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apply
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good
opportunaties
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opportunities
. A few days ago, I went to a local
library
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and
also
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I was so surprised.The
mainly
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reason why that it
do
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does
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not have many improvements.
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, it
do
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not have enough tables, chairs,
bookshelves
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and bookshelves
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espically
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especially
books are
locking
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.
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why some children do not read books or stories.These
problems
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are really vital
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it
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should
be solve
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so you should pay attention
these
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problems
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. First of all, you have to tell the government these
problems
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these
problems
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.
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,
government
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the government
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will pay for our local
library
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and give many facilities to it.If
government
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the government
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will pay
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pays
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for our
library
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,we will buy
a new equipments
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new equipment
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and we will repair our
library
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. I think that you are
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libraryʼs
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the libraryʼs
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manager.
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why you should focus on our local
library
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and
also
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you will solve
this
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problem.To be
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,
this
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is your duty so you should do it.I believe that you will understand
this
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situation and give more details.I hope you will reply
my
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letter.
Your
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faithfully Botirova Ruxshona

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task achievement
Make sure to provide a clearer introduction to the purpose of the letter to improve task response.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your ideas within and between paragraphs.
task achievement
You showed concern for the library and made suggestions for improvement, which is commendable.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is structured with a clear beginning, middle, and end.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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