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The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the expenses on six categories
items
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of items
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 paid by four different citizens in 2012. To analyze
this
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 diagram, we begin by taking a closer look at the data presented, it is obvious that British spent the most among
four
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the four
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 nations. Camara received the highest proportion between these six
type
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types
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 of goods. As
it
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apply
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can be seen,
British
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the British
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have
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had
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 the most capability
on
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of
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 consuming in the year
of
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apply
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2012,
in contrast
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,
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the Belguim
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Belguim
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Belgium
 population did not tend to
cost
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spend
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 a lot on the given items, they spent the least among
four
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the four
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 countries;
moreover
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, they did not
having
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 apparent bias between these six categories, by approximately 6 pounds difference. Purchaser
on
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in
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 Spain remained their spending from 150 to 158 on each consumer goods in 2012.
Austrian
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Austria
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cost
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costs
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 more on books, toys, and camaras rather than console games, outdoor game accessories, and cosmetics. In terms of goods, camaras
undeniabley
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undeniably
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 became the most popular items in 2012,
espacially
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especially
 in Britain. In opposite, console games received
minimize
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 pounds between these different categories.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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