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The increasing use of air transport to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season is a positive development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is a positive development that using air transport to export
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 to
countries
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do
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that do
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 not have
ability
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the ability
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 to plant enough
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 for
thier
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their
 population
due to
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 several issues
such
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 as a hot climate. I believe
this
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 is a positive development because it benefits consumers.
To begin
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, Some
countries
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 have
a
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hot weather which leads to many problems.
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Some lands do not have a huge space to plant
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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that
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which
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 means they do not have enough food for their population meanwhile, some
countries
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 have crop surplus of
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 that they might
exchanges
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exchange
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 benefits.
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, In 2003, Saudi Arabia
has
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had
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corp
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a corp
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 shortage
due to
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 a hot climate and There
are
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were
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 a fire in some farms which
lacks
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lacked
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 corp to 50%.
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, The country made
a
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dealt
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deal
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 with several
countries
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 for
exported
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exporting
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fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 to Saudi Arabia and Saudi Arabia exported oil to these
countries
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.
Secondly
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, Some
countries
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 depend on the export of
a
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fresh
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 for their economy
that
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which
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 means they should use air transport to
be
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ensure
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 their
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 are fresh.
Also
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,
This
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help
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helps
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 Farmers to earn more money if they sell their
a
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apply
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Fresh
crops
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such
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apply
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as
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For
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 some Farmers sell
a
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apply
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frech uncrops
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fresh crops
 for 2000$ per month
while
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 several farmers sell
a
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apply
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frech
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fresh
crops
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 for 6000$ every month.
Moreover
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, They sell in a normal case but if there are global
issue
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issues
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of
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with
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crops
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, they might sell their
frech
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free
crops
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 double or more. In conclusion, I believe that using air transport will
have solves
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solve
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 many issues in the world.
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Also
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Also,
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 I talked about some lands
depende
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depend
 on the export of
a
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apply
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fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 for their economy and some
counties
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countries
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 do not have a convenient climate to plant enough
crops
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to
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for
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 their population.

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task achievement
Clearly state your opinion in the introduction. Make a definitive statement about whether you agree or disagree with the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that you provide a separate paragraph for each main point. This helps in logically structuring your ideas and improves readability.
coherence and cohesion
Use connectors and transitional phrases to link your ideas better. This will enhance the flow of your writing.
task achievement
Check for grammatical errors and spelling mistakes to enhance the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
You have made a relevant argument about the economic benefits of air transport for farmers exporting fresh produce.
task achievement
Your examples regarding Saudi Arabia's crop shortage were relevant and illustrated a real-world application of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • International trade
  • Consumer diversity
  • Dietary diversity
  • Carbon emissions
  • Agricultural development
  • Sustainability
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic benefits
  • Employment opportunities
  • Food security
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