The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
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think that working days in a
week
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must be shorter and there should be more free
times
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. I, partially, agree with that opinion because it changes depending on
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the situation
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. So, if there is
shorter
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a shorter
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working
week
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,
people
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can find enough spare
time
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to spend
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with their family or
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persons.
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, it contributes positively
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social life, mental well-being
as well as
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productivity. But there are several aspects that make it impossible to reduce working days, especially, for
countries
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which have to increase
living
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the living
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standards of their citizens. On the one hand, it is important to have free
time
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during the
week
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for workers because of their happiness and mental health for the purpose of developing their productivity. So, In case
people
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have more leisure
time
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, they can manage their
time
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easily and can plan activities that make them happy
such
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as meeting with their close friends or spending
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with their family members. In that situation, they become more productive and it creates some advantages for governments.
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, research
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that in developing
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such
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as
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the US
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,
UK
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the UK
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and Germany, the reason behind
successful
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a successful
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economy is that working days are generally shorter and employees have
enough
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longer weekends to get rest.
On the other hand
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, in some
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,
population
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the population
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should work longer for the aim of developing their
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all
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spheres like education, health sector, industry, military forces and so on to create advantageous conditions for the next generations.
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, in Azerbaijan, almost in all sectors
people
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work for 8 hours
in
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a day and 6
day
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in
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a
week
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. It allows
to
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us to
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strengthen all
sectors
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the sectors
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that
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mentioned. In conclusion,
although
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there are some positive effects of having shorter working periods in the
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, especially for governments which have strong economies, it is not
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idea
that
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to decrease them for
countries
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that have to increase their living standards.

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task achievement
Make sure to give clear reasons for your opinion. State your main idea clearly in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas better. Use paragraphs for different points.
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Use simple and clear examples to support your points. Make sure they relate to your argument.
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The essay presents both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion summarizes the main point of the essay well.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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