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Band 5.5

Your neighbour keeps his animal in his garden and they create problem for you.you have problem with animal.write a letter to your neighbour.describe the problem.suggest the solution.ehat action willyou take if its unsolved.

Dear Mr. Darcy I am writing to address an occuring issue concerning your
dog
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 (Harry). Since you have
build
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 a
dog
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 house for
harry
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Harry
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 in your
backyard
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, and decided to keep him without a leash, he freely wanders around and often visits my
backyard
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. In my
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backyard
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backyard,
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 I grow my vegetables, shrubs and flowers, which
has
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have
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 been destroyed by your
dog
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.
This
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occured
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occurred
 several times and
this
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 has caused me a substantial amount of inconvenience, as all my efforts to grow my plants
results
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resulted
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 in vain.
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, he
also
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prefer
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 to do his business on my lawn and I have to clean it regularly, which has
exacerbrated
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exacerbated
 my problems. To mitigate
this
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 issue, I propose using a leash that could
constraint
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 your
dog
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 to stay in your
backyard
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. I hope you can sympathize with my problems and take
a
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apply
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prompt action to resolve
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otherwise
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them otherwise
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, I would be obliged to call animal control services. I trust you to take an appropriate measure to resolve
this
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 issue. Yours sincerely, John Doe

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Coherence and Cohesion
While the letter is generally well-structured, ensuring that each paragraph develops a single idea more clearly would improve coherence.
Task Achievement
Make sure to proofread for minor grammatical errors which can distract from the overall message.
Task Achievement
You have effectively communicated the main issue regarding the dog's impact on your garden.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is polite and maintains a suitable writing tone throughout, which is commendable.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • disturbance
  • noisy
  • damage
  • health concerns
  • communal living
  • amend
  • neighborly relations
  • solution
  • properly trained
  • confined area
  • fence
  • mediation
  • local authorities
  • concerns
  • issue
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