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Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how it should be celebrated. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter * Say what type of party should be held e.g. themed, fancy dress, black tie event * Suggest a suitable venue * Make a recoomendation as to entertainment e.g. Dj, jazz band etc.

Dear Albert I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that
i
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I
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 am very excited
for
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about
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 your landmark birthday party. I know it is next month, but we need to decide the theme of the party. I will suggest that your birthday theme should be scary and thrilling, as you like
horrer
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horror
 movies.
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Whereas you
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You
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 will be dressed like a vampire and
rest
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the rest
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 of us choose any scary outfit with haunting
decoration
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decorations
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 like
skeleton
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a skeleton
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. We need to book a big hall for the event,
last
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 year, there was
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a miscalulation
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miscalulation
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miscalculation
 of guests and there was no room for extra people. You can book the Holiday INN hotel
beacuse
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because
 it is very spacious and can hold
upto
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up to
 100 guests. If you buy their event package they will provide complimentary
Dj
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DJ
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 for the event. I am looking forward
for
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to
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 your reply.
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully ABC

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Consider rephrasing for greater clarity and detail about the theme. For example, mention specific decoration ideas or activities that align with the scary theme.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to break the letter into clearer paragraphs based on the different points you are addressing. For instance, one paragraph could be dedicated to the theme, another to the venue, and a third to entertainment.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling errors, such as 'horror' instead of 'horrer' and 'because' instead of 'beacuse', for a more polished presentation.
task achievement
The suggestion of a scary theme is relevant and personalized based on your friend's interests, which shows thoughtfulness.
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The idea of having a DJ included in the event package is practical and adds to the overall entertainment proposal.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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