In many countries, people can eat a wide variety of food today. As a result, they eat more food from other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of the development outweigh disadvantages?

These days, an ample variety of
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available
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, they prefer to have other cultural
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which comes from different regions as
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to local
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has its benefits, it
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comes with a few downsides. In
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. One clear advantage is that
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individuals can enjoy different
variety
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of foods and can feel the vibe and taste of
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different
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, which helps some people
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not feel
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, An international student can buy the same groceries they eat at the
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variety of
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good
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relations
among different countries, helps in
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job opportunities for native people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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