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Many people try to balance work and other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve a better balance? Beka

Many individuals strive to maintain a
balance
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 between their job and personal
life
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, but achieving
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 can be quite challenging. Laziness and unwillingness to change can prevent you from achieving
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. To do
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 you need to
work
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 hard,
work
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 and overcome your laziness every day. One of the main problems is
work
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 overload. With the increase in tasks and responsibilities, many employees feel constant pressure and stress.
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 can lead to burnout, decreased productivity, and even health problems.
Work
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 overload is often associated with a
lack
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 of resources and support from management,
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 high competition in the workplace. It is important to learn to recognize the signs of overload and take timely measures to reduce it. Many people complain about the
lack
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 of
time
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 for personal matters and leisure. Long working hours, the need to complete tasks outside of
work
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 hours, and constant business trips can leave little
time
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 for family, friends, and hobbies.
Lack
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 of
time
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 can
also
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 be
due to
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 ineffective
time
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 management and
lack
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 of planning skills. It is important to learn how to prioritize and delegate tasks to free up
time
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 for personal interests. Many people nowadays try to find a
balance
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 between
work
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 and personal
life
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.
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 is very commendable, but not many achieve it. Programs designed for the needs of a particular person can be used to solve the problem of
balance
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. These programs can be designed either by the person seeking
balance
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 or by a special worker or psychologist who helps to achieve
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.
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,
work
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-
life
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balance
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 is written a lot. A lot of practical advice is given: how much
time
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 should
work
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take
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takes
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 up, and how much
time
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 should family, communication with friends and hobbies take up. It is important that everyone has a stable job and a personal
life
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that is
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 understandable to others. And
then
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 - on the list: cultural trips, vacations in Europe, weekends outside the city.
This
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 "gentleman's set" is socially approved standards, focusing on which we, in theory, should realize ourselves in all guises.
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, there will be gaps in the picture of
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life
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the life
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 that there will be nothing to fill, or the canvas will turn out to be one
color
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 - dull and boring. In conclusion, many people want to achieve
balance
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, but not everyone succeeds
,
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 because
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 requires a professional approach. Which many do not have
.
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Task Achievement
The introduction effectively outlines the task but could better introduce the main points of discussion for enhanced clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using more varied linking words to improve the flow between ideas and paragraphs, making connections smoother for the reader.
Task Achievement
Some points are mentioned but could benefit from more specific examples or detailed explanations to support your arguments.
Task Achievement
The essay identifies key issues related to work-life balance clearly and acknowledges the complexity of achieving this balance.
Task Achievement
There is a good attempt to address both the problems and possible solutions related to the topic, showcasing a thoughtful approach.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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