There is an ongoing debate about whether some individuals consider that hard work and determination are necessary to succeed in life , others believe that having
money
or an attractive appearance are more vital to gain an achievement. I will discuss both perspectives before presenting my opinion,justifying the first view.
In favour of the first view, the main point is that having a goal is important to proceed in each stage of life ,Use synonyms
then
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people
should support their own aim Use synonyms
with
working hard without knowing night and day.Change preposition
by
Moreover
, Linking Words
while
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people
come across a failure ,determination paves the way for starting again .Use synonyms
Because if
a person gives up his goal in a breakdown of Correct word choice
If
first
risk, he will not gain any achievement.Change the article
the first
People
should endeavour to learn Use synonyms
lesson
from their experiences and resilience is a key factor for Fix the agreement mistake
lessons
this
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For example
, the well-known Turkish millionaire Acun Ilıcalı Linking Words
came across
Verb problem
went
a
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apply
bankruptcy
several times before becoming one of the richest men in the country.
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bankrupt
On the other hand
,Linking Words
people
sometimes need Use synonyms
money
to get success in an achievement Use synonyms
such
as education.Today, the majority of students struggle with financial difficulties and it discourages Linking Words
from
going on their education at Correct pronoun usage
them from
prestigiuous
universities.Correct your spelling
prestigious
Furthermore
,Linking Words
people
think that if a person does not have a good appearance , he does not abilities to gain success.Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, it is Linking Words
a
wrong discrimination because it depends on personal perseverance Remove the article
apply
not
clothes or Add the comma(s)
, not
money
.Use synonyms
For instance
, in England, a poor young Indian girl became a minister, not giving up continuing.
In conclusion, I believe that if Linking Words
people
really want to succeed in life , despite some Use synonyms
money
issues and others' thoughts , they will be able to overcome all difficulties with determination and working hard.Use synonyms
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