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The aim of this report is to analyse the graph presented and make relevant comparisons. The line graph illustrates the average of the UK commuters travel habits by day, car, bus or train from 1970-2030.

The aim of this report is to analyse the graph presented and make relevant comparisons. The line graph illustrates the average of the UK commuters travel habits by day, car, bus or train from 1970-2030.
The given line graph presents information about citizens of
UK
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the UK
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 travelling via the means of
car
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, bus or train from the year 1970 to 2030. The number of people
are
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is
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 in millions on the y-axis and the decades are mentioned on the x-axis. It can be seen that
initially
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 in the year 1970, people travelled the most in a
car
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 which continued to increase from around 5
million
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 in 1980 to a whopping 9
million
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 in 2030.
Additionally
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, a surge can be noticed in the number of commuters travelling
in
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on
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 a train which increased from 2
million
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 approximately to nearly 7
million
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 users. Meanwhile, bus commuters dropped steadily in the past six decades reaching down to around just 3
million
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 travellers. One of the possible
reason
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reasons
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 for
this
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 decline can be that most of the population shifted towards using a
car
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 as a mode of transportation.
Overall
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, it can concluded that UK nationals drastically choose different modes of vehicle facilities and
at the end
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 of 2030,
car
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 is still the most popular option.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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