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The graph below shows the production levels of main fuels in a European country from 1981 to 2000

The graph below shows the production levels of main fuels in a European country from 1981 to 2000
The graph illustrates the output levels of three major fuel types—
petroleum
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 , coal , and natural
gas
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 —in a European country between 1981 and 2000.
Overall
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 ,
while
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 the production of
natureof
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nature of
 natural
gas
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 saw a substantial increase throughout the period, the opposite trend was observed for both
petroleum
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 and coal. Notably, natural
gas
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 experienced the most significant growth , albeit from a comparatively low starting point. In 1981, the output of
petroleumof
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petroleum
petroleum of
petroleum
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 stood at approximately 98
tons
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.
This
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 figure rose to a peak of 130
tons
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 by 1987.
Although
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 it declined in the early 1990s,
petroleum
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 production recovered to around 121
tons
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 by the year 2000, showing a moderate
overall
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 increase from 1981. Natural
gas
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 began at roughly 40
tons
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 in 1981 and steadily climbed over the years, reaching about 85
tons
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 by 2000.
This
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 represents the largest upward trend
aamong
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among
 the three fuels. contrast
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In
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, In
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 contrast, coal production experienced fluctuations. Starting at 80
tons
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 in 1981, it dropped sharply to 50
toto
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to
 50
tons
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 by 1985. It
then
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 rebounded to 75
tons
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 in 1987 before undergoing a continuous decline, reaching its lowest point of just 39
tons
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 by 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, gas, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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