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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. (Ulvi)

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. (Ulvi)
The bar chart compares
expenditures
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the expenditures
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 of five sectors in four
differen
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different
countries
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 in 2009. The units are measured in percentages.
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, what stands out from the chart is that housing was the dominant share almost in all
countries
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, as opposed to health care and clothing which ranked
last
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. Moving to a more detailed analysis, housing was higher than other sectors in the USA and Canada, accounting for 25% and 22%, respectively, which was followed by transportation at more than 15% in both of them. The figure for food in Canada was more than in the USA by 2% with the latter comprising 13%. The percentage of health care and clothing ranked
last
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 in both
countries
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 constituting less than 10%. With regard to expenditures in the
UK
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 and
Japan
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, the indicator of housing was more than other sectors in the
UK
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 (24%),
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 food was the dominant sector in
Japan
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 (23%).  The figure for food in the
UK
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 and that for housing in
Japan
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 were approximately the same, at 22%. 
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 the proportion of transportation in the
UK
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 (15%) was 1.5 times more
that
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than
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 that of transportation in
Japan
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 (10%), clothing and health care
were
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had
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 the lowest shares in both
countries
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 with merely under 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, uk, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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