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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table shows the underground transport systems in six cities ; London,Paris,Tokyo, Washington DC,Kyoto,
Los
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and Los
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 Angeles open at different times.
Overall
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, the
amount
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number
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 of kilometres travelled and
passengers
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passengers'
passenger's
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enroute
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en route
 increased over the years.
Tokyo`has
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Tokyo has
 the highest
numbers
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number
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 of passengers travelling
whereas
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 London city has the greatest kilometres covered. The first four cities London,Paris,Tokyo and Washington
has
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 the highest distance travelled 394,199,155,126 kilometres respectively and
number
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a number
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 of visitors.
On the other hand
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, the
last
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 two capital cities Kyoto and Los Angeles
has
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have
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 the lowest number of km covered and travellers.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inaugurated
  • passenger throughput
  • network extensiveness
  • utilization rate
  • infrastructure
  • capacity
  • comparative analysis
  • disparity
  • ridership
  • underutilized
  • commuter density
  • historical significance
  • relatively recent
  • well-established
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