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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
The line graph indicates changes in the quantities of goods transported in the UK from 1974 and 2002 by four different kinds of transport,
road
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,
water
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,
rail
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 and
pipeline
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.
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, three sorts of goods,
road
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,
water
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 and
pipeline
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 experienced a significant increase over the period,
while
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 the figure
of
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for
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rail
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 unchanged. In detail, the data in 1975 shows that
road
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 was the largest
kinds
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 of
transports
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transport
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 with almost 70
mililions
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million
millions
tonnes
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, following
rail
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 with over 40
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millions
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million
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tonnes
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 and
water
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 with approximately 40
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millions
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million
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tonnes
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. In
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contrast
, the figure
of
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pipeline
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 was the lowest, accounting for under 10
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millions
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million
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tonnes
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 in the same year.
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,
road
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,
water
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 and
pipeline
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 saw a substantial rise between 1975 and 2000, from over 70
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millions
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million
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 to nearly 100
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millions
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million
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, almost 40
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millions
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million
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 to about 62
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millions
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million
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, and under 10
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millions
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million
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 to 20
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millions
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million
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.
On the other hand
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, the figure
of
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rail
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 shows the number of
rail
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 transport unchanged and remained between about 30
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millions
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million
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 and 40
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millions
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million
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 during the same period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, water, rail, pipeline, tonnes, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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