Some people believe that adventurous travel experiences can significantly enhance personal growth and development. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge.

There is no doubt that these days the number of adventurous travel experiences has increased. The question is, does it enhance personal
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or it has no
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am going to discuss my personal view and draw my personal conclusion. In terms of the idea that adventurous travel experiences can significantly enhance personal
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and
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completly
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agree and the main reason given to support
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claim is that when you experience adventure in your life your adrenaline rate will increase dramatically, and
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recent studies adrenaline is linked with
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you will feel, In my
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happiness
has a major impact in personal
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and
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in many ways, the more you are happy the more you will learn about yourself and seek
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in many aspects of your life,
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the
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difference
you would feel in your health.
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a study on someone who just finished doing
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bungee
jumping and the interviewer asked what did he feel and what did he learn from
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experince
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experience
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shocking as he said that he felt
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different
and strong and that he learnt something about himself which is that he can do whatever he wants if he is determined to do it. In conclusion,
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a lot of people who would disagree and view that
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travels and trips
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affect any aspect of a person's life ,
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strongly agree with the idea of it making a significant impact on
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believe that the more you will experience
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kind of trips the
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healthier
you would be mentally and physically.

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The use of a personal example related to bungee jumping is a strong way to illustrate your main point.

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