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The graph below shows the percentage of the population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below shows the percentage of the population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line graph provides data in terms of urbanization in four different countries Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia from 1970 to 2040.
Overall
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, the percentage for all rates will experience an increase through the period.
In addition
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, the
cities
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 in Malaysia are going to be the most populated compared to others. The initial total percentage of the
population
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 in
cities
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 in Malaysia and the Philippines was approximately the same (30 per cent) and continued to rise, respectively.
While
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 the rate of citizens in the Philippines'
cities
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 started to decrease in 1990 by 20%, the
population
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 in Malay
cities
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 albeit in reverse.
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,
this
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 index will pick the heist point in
population
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 among the rest over 80 per cent.
In contrast
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, Indonesia experienced the fastest growth. It started at only 15% in 1970 but increased incredibly, surpassing Thailand by 2000. By 2020, its urban
population
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 reached almost 55%, and it is expected to keep growing. Meanwhile, Thailand had the slowest rise, from around 10% to 40%, but it is likely to grow
further
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 by 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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