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In the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, it has been predicted that future cars will be all automated and without a driver inside. I believe the advantages of
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 projection outweigh the disadvantages since it is safer. On the one hand, a primary drawback of
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 cars is that some occupations in transportation or
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logistic
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industries
 will disappear. To be specific, in the future, the role of drivers will be replaced by machines, as they can make more accurate and precise decisions and allow companies to reduce their budgets. Billions of people who work in associated fields,
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 as bus drivers or truck drivers, will lose their lifetime jobs or even lead to a breakdown of the family.
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, I believe that
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 issue can be addressed sufficiently with appropriate strategies, but people’s
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safety
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, one of the key
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 is that
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 cars offer
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safer road use for both passengers and pedestrians. Notably, most car accidents today are consciously or unconsciously human-related, and
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 always
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 to extreme consequences like the loss of human lives.
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, because of the wrong
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 that individuals
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,
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 as running red lights or drinking
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, when every single route that vehicles pass is controlled and managed by machines, it is unlikely for fatal accidents to happen in
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 future. In conclusion, I believe that the positive effects of
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 vehicles outweigh the negative influences.
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 they may lead to the vanishing of some occupations,
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 prevent accidents that
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 by the ignorance of humans.

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language
Make sure to proofread your work to catch spelling and grammatical errors such as 'driveless' (which should be 'driverless'), 'logestic' (which should be 'logistic'), and 'saftey' (which should be 'safety'). This will strengthen your overall presentation.
content
While you present strong points about the benefits of driverless vehicles, consider adding more detailed examples or statistics that could further bolster your argument. This can enhance the relevance and specificity of your ideas.
strength
The introduction clearly states your belief about the advantages outweighing the disadvantages, which gives a clear focus to your essay.
strength
You have effectively acknowledged the potential drawbacks of driverless cars, which shows a balanced perspective and enhances your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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