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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

It is important for all towns and cities to have large public spaces such as parks and squares, Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

This
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 is essential for all the major townships, to have big open
areas
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 like gardens and squares. As these are one of the most
intrigal
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integral
part
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parts
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 of any major township
due to
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 various reasons. I completely support
this
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 idea. In the following essay, I'll discuss the benefits of having these open spaces in big cities and how
it
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they
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affects
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affect
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 the lives of the people living in those cities.
Firstly
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, It is Vital to have huge open locations for
insta thence
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instance
, big gardens,
down town
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areas
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 etc, these
areas
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 are the major places where
community
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the community
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 meets and builds
the
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apply
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different connections.
hence
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 bringing different communities and cultures together. These locations
also
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plays
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 a major role in community
celebartions
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celebrations
celebration
 of different festivals, events etc. like New
year
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Year
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 celebrations or
Pride
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the Pride
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 month parade in
toronto
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Toronto
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downtwon
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downtown
.
Scondly
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Secondly
, Gardens or parks in big urban
areas
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 are like
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an oasis
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oasis
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oases
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 in the middle of
dessert
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the dessert
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, which not only
helps
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help
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 in reducing the air pollution of the
city
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 but
also
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provides
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provide
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 space where citizens find peace,
tranquility
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tranquillity
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 and closeness to nature in the big cities,
for
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example
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example,
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 high park in
toronto
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Toronto
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,
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city
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a city
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 park in New
york
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York
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, which provides ample space for people to experience the peaceful environment in the middle of busy hectic
city
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 life. In Conclusion, I would like to mention that these spaces are like lungs for the big urban
areas
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, that
serves
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serve
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 different purposes and are ,
hence
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 important for
city
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 planners to include locations like
this
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 when planning any big
city
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more logically. A clear progression of ideas will help ensure that your reader follows your argument more easily.
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Ensure that your ideas are well-supported with specific examples and details, which will strengthen your response.
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Check your work for grammatical errors and improve sentence structure to enhance readability and fluency.
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Your essay presents a clear position on the topic, indicating strong agreement with the necessity of public spaces.
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You include relevant examples that support your argument, such as High Park in Toronto and the downtown area during festivals.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public spaces
  • recreational areas
  • physical health
  • community events
  • social connections
  • sense of belonging
  • environmental benefits
  • air quality
  • biodiversity
  • urban areas
  • aesthetic appeal
  • tourists
  • local economies
  • relaxation
  • mental well-being
  • urban life
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