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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie chart and bar graph represent the
favorite
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favourite
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 takeaways of people in Canada and the number of
Indian
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 restaurants located in the Country respectively.
Overall
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, the count for
Indian
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 food outlets has rapidly increased from the year 1960 to 1997 after which it has been nearly 8000 till 2015.
Additionally
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, Chinese and
Indian
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 cuisine are among the top favorites of Canadian citizens followed by Italian, Persian and other food choices. A large proportion of the population
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 prefers to never order
meal
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 and the top four cooking cultures are preferred by more than 70 per cent of the populace. Meanwhile, the pool of options
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 offers Thai, Mexican, Japanese, Greek and many more which happen to be the favourites of the takeaway community.
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, there is no relation given between the fact that maybe
due to
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 the increasing number of
Indian
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 cuisine places, people started to prefer the cuisine but one may draw
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 insights.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words indian with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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