Your friend's dog has recently passed away. Write a letter to console your friend. In your letter: Express your sympathy Include memories you have about the dog Invite your friend to do something with you You do NOT need to write an

Dear
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, I would like to express my deepest
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to you and your family.I was heartbroken to hear that your dog '
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oscar
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' has passed yesterday. I remember
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when I used to visit
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your place. One day, you were not
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in the town. You requested me to look after
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.
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, it was really hard for me to stay around
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. Later on, we became good
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friends
when I took him to the garden and
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some time
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playing with him.
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, he
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me once from wild dogs on the roads. I was so scared at that time, but
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helped me to come out
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that situation. I would to invite you
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my house next week. I believe that
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break will heal you especially when you spend some time with me. Yours lovingly, Raman

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Consider rewriting your introduction to include a more empathetic opening statement. For example, you could say, 'I am so sorry for your loss.' This will help express your sympathy more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check for spelling and grammatical mistakes, such as 'condolenses' which should be 'condolences,' and 'friens' which should be 'friends.' These small errors can impact the overall quality of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea, which can improve clarity. You might consider splitting the memory and invitation into separate paragraphs.
task achievement
You have effectively shared a personal memory about Oscar, which adds a nice touch to your letter and shows your friendship with the dog.
coherence and cohesion
The affectionate closing 'Yours lovingly' is a nice way to convey your support and care for your friend during this tough time.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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