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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give information about total
world
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energy
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 consumption and electricity generation. The units are measured in percentages.
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, what stands out from the charts is that fuel
energy
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 was the main type of used
energy
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 and generated electricity in the
world
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, Moving to a more detailed analysis, the amount of oil was the highest for total
world
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energy
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 consumption at 34.3% which was followed by that of coal and gas, 25.1 and 20.9, respectively. The figure for combustible renewables and waste accounted for roughly one-ten,
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 nuclear, hydro, and other
energy
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 sources comprised 9.1% together in the
energy
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consmuption
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consumption
. With regard to the total
world
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energy
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 generation,
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 the proportion of coal ranked first
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 39,8, that of gas constituted 19.6%. The indicators of
hydre
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hydro
hydra
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 and nuclear were approximately the same accounting
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 between 16.1% and 15.7%. The percentage of oil (6.7%) and other sources of electricity generation (2.1%) was the lowest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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